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    I can't believe it has been over a year since I've posted here! How time flies.... I have recently been making more time for myself to write - so here is my latest poem. Some of my poems don't have titles, and I'm not sure if this one ultimately will either. But if you have an idea for a title, please do share - I would love to hear suggestions. This remains the only place on the internet that I share my poems - some day perhaps I'll start working on some other method with which to share them with a wider audience (an ebook?). Please let me know what you think - I like to consider my poems never quite finished.



    Flitting, fleeting, filtering light
    Stirs the needles and blades
    The forest is slowly coming alive
    Quick now! Before it fades

    My footsteps send wildflower seeds to the air
    Dancing and twirling in space
    Birthing a carpet of blazing displays
    Shooting stars, lupine, and lace

    Glades beckon forth, glistening with
    The dew from an angel's kiss
    What have I done to earn such reward?
    What karma has granted me this?

    To protect you, oh Forest, for my grandchild's child
    Is not a noble or lofty goal
    For your greatest resource that I selfishly take
    Is nourishment for my soul

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    That's a beautiful photography, Hank, and a stirring poem.

    The title that keeps coming to my mind is: "The Legacy."
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    There are many visual references in the poem. At least, I see the things about which I'm reading. Then, there's somewhat of a surprise ending. It veers off unexpectedly when you reveal your point of view. Putting those ingredients into the pot, I come up with "The Way I See It."

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    Hank, This is lovely. I feel your deep connection with the land you love so much. I think an eBook would be a great idea!

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    Thanks everyone for your comments. I'm kind of digging the "legacy" idea. I think I'll also tinker with the last stanza a little bit - it doesn't quite flow enough. I'll re-post if I have any breakthroughs!

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    Hank, I think "The Legacy" is perfect for this! What a beautiful way you have with words. The picture you painted with the poem made me totally connect with the image. TFS!

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    Hi, as a poet I appreciate the turn at the end very much. I would suggest using "before it fades" as a title. I, too, regard my work as ever evolving, never finished. I send them out anyway. Thanks for sharing, Dawn

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    Hank, I am very, very late to the show but I wanted to comment anyway. The poem is tender, thoughtful and beautifully written. I hope you will continue to share your work with us.
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