Hi Ric This is one unusual crane image !!! Actually with a better head angle on the close bird you might have pulled it off !!!!
Lots of little details would have helped you Body of close bird is dark and the head needs lightening also. The bird in the rear has a dark area in the neck competing for attention The bg is fitting for the overall mood
Interesting to see how all that needs to be right with more conventional images are just as important here !!!!
The problem in this image is the light angle. Try to position yourself so that your shadow is pointed at your subjects. Direct frontal lighting will eliminate the shadowing apparent in this image and allow the detail to be seen. When you are taking an image of two birds, it is important to wait until both birds give you a good head angle before you press the shutter.