The grass is really taking away from your subject and is very distracting. I also find the bird a little soft. You may want to read this article about the whites as they look Grey in this image.
I think I see what you were going for with the green. It might have worked better if there were more green behind the bird than in front and if the transition from green to sand didn't bisect the bird so much.
As is, a crop from the bottom would help, but the way to go was low, low low... That would have eliminated the merge of the bird's chin and the single leaf... Lastly, the bird's head is facing slightly away rather than slightly towards you.
later and love, artie
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Hi everyone, awesome feedback. I REALLY appreciate the constructive criticism.
Thanks for the link, Maxis, I actually have been told by others, Axel for one I think, that my shots are a little dim. I think it's older lower quality screen on the Dell laptop that I RAW process on. They look just right to me and probably not so to others. I'll be looking for an alternative. Meanwhile, yes I had read about half of Art's darkish egret post and will head back and read the rest...
Thanks Jim, yes, I do find myself enjoying shots of shorebirds that didn't end up with the usual sandy background. The white/sand colored bird on a sand colored background can be a little visually boring, and I like those funny little sprouts of beach vegetation. But I knew it wasn't quite working. The line does bisect the bird. I wish he was in a uniform hill -of this same grass.
And Artie, wow, you again have made me see something I didn't notice. I wondered if someone would mention the head angle, but I didn't notice the blade of grass, which, yeah, it is kind of distracting.
I wish I could get out there to places like this every day to practice this stuff!!!
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Thanks,
Sean McMahon
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