You did as well as possible from where you stood but you were somewhat up against it.... The birds were too high relative to your position and the resulting view of the near wings leaves a lot to be desired.... I try to make flight images only of birds less than 20 degrees above the horizon--these two are close to 45 degrees up, or of birds directly overhead.
SH and EXP good but birds a bit too centered.
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