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    Take control of the course you are on
    The days pass by until they are gone
    Hold on dear to all your family ties
    Time to make the most of each sunrise
    Every day awaits a brand new start
    Rejoice this life and open your heart
    Forgive all the sins that come your way
    Your words can cut deep, watch what you say
    So with autumn knocking at the door
    It's time to reflect your life and more
    Look how fast the time has slipped away
    Just blink your eyes it's another day


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    Take control of the course you’re on
    The days pass by until they’re all gone
    Hold on dear to your family ties
    Time to take hold of each sunrise
    Each day awaits a brand new start
    Rejoice this life and open your heart
    Forgive all the sins that come your way
    Words can cut deep so watch what you say
    With autumn knocking at your door
    It's time to reflect on your life and more
    Look how fast time has slipped away
    Just blink your eyes it's another day
    Last edited by denise ippolito; 10-10-2009 at 07:55 AM.

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    Hi Denise, Nice image with thoughtful words. My vote is #2.

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    Lance Warley
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    #2 for me, because of "...take hold of each sunrise."

    And the photo complements it beautifully.

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    Thanks for the feedback, I appreciate it.

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    Ákos Lumnitzer
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    Both read really well IMHO. I prefer the first one. :)

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    Akos, Thankyou for your edit. I appreciate it.

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    Very nice image Denise. Very, Very thoughtful and meaningful words. I like #2 better.

    Eric
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    I like #2 as well. I offer these two very small changes for the sake of cadence, though:

    "It's time to reflect ON your life and more..."

    and

    "Words can cut deep SO watch what you say..."

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    Thankyou Eric and Julie, I appreciate the feedback.
    Jules, I made the changes-Thankyou I appreciate it.

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