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    We entered the trailhead at Glacier Point
    Our journey had begun
    The path was forged through rolling hills
    We were headed into the sun

    The remnants of the years gone past
    Were so visible everywhere
    The dead trees poked up from the ground
    And the forest was now quite bare

    As we got further into the hike
    Not another soul was found
    We came across a lonely bear track
    That was molded in the ground

    We made our way to a high point
    With views of the valley below
    We could see across the vista
    To where the waterfalls would flow

    We rounded the corner and soon we would see
    Half Dome in our view
    The granite rock with a glowing top
    Had an ever changing hue

    Going deeper into the trail
    We found a spot to take a break
    Across the bridge we stood
    Pondering the images we would make

    Our souls bonded deep with nature
    As we hiked this vast wilderness
    When the trail ended we were both beat
    The mountains would take no less


    I took this image from the Panorama Trail, I liked it and I know many of you will say I should have moved left or right-but this time I wanted to make the dead tree obscure the mountains, that was just my vision.
    Last edited by denise ippolito; 08-20-2009 at 06:51 PM.

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    I would not not not (did I say "not?") say to move one way or the other. I love foreground trees. I think they add tremendous depth by making viewers feel they want to look around the tree to see what's behind it.

    The poem is great...plenty of substance. Just one thing on the rhyme scheme, Denise. All the stanzas are ABCB, and it works, except for the first one. You might want to do a touch-up there.

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    Lance, I fixed it see if it's better.Thanks!!!:)

    I love FG trees also.

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    Cha-ching!!!!!!!!!!! :))))))

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    I would have composed the tree to the left, but I understand your vision. Very nice work with the color. I enjoyed the poem, an added treat!

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    David, Thankyou very much. I appreciate the feedback. You know I'm a big fan of your work.

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    Very nice picture to go with your poem. The landscape looks charred as if it were razed by a fire. Which is probably not the case, just your treatment really conveys the barrenness of the forest and the mountain that takes your breath away (and your energy). Great poem to go with it. :)

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    Akos, Thanks for your edit. I changed it. Glad you like it.:)

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    I like the tree position! I think it's height mimics the height of the mountains. Lance is right - the poetry sings along now.

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    Thanks Jules.

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