While the repost looks better, and it was a nice try, shortcuts are rarely a substitute for proper technique
The histogram is still clipped.
Here is an important lesson for everyone: if you have clipped highlights, no amount of darkening or Linear Burning or Multiplying is gonna bring back detail. You need to go back and reconvert. Best yet, all of this is clearly stated in the post on saving the whites in Educational Resources, BPN's most under-utilized Forum.
Consider yourself chastized! (Did I spell that correctly???)
I look forward to an unclipped repost. Make sure that you have your highlight and shadow warnings on. For a guide to ACR conversions, see BAA Bulletin 291 here: http://www.birdsasart.com/bn291.htm