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    Here is a new one on egret... added a bit of canvas on top, cropped, used the water color filter and added the chop. C&C welcome.

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    Indranil, I am getting use to the different style crops for the Asian look-I'm thinking the bird could be lower in the frame. I like the color of the water and the effect applied looks great! I'm seeing some artifacts around the chop. I'm liking the long panel look you've gotten on these verticals!

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    Hi - agree with Denise - would like to see the bird lower on the frame. Like the feel to this one :)

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    Indranil, You could move the bird down just a tiny bit, but I like it as is also, the extra space above the bird plus the bird flying away allows me to wonder where it is going. As I have mentioned prior to this on other threads, the empty space is an important element in Asian art. I agree with the need here to clean up around the chop and calligraphy, I see the artifacts also. The letters within your chop need to be bolder, they are getting lost here.

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    Denise, Lance, Dan, thans for the feedback. Here is the repost...

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    Indranil, The water looks much clearer in the re-post. I like it!!

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    I like the repost too.....quite an improvement IMO

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    Much improved Indranil! One thing to remember though, when using the chop and the calligraphy, you don't want draw too much of the viewers attention away from you main subject (the bird and the space here). I feel that maybe your chop/cal. are too big here. My eye is going back and forth between the bird and the chop/cal. I hate to keep picking at this but your creation is very nice and I would like to see it optimized (IMO):)

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