Hi Sue,
IMO the image is too dark (it could be my monitor), also there are some dust spot above the head, and the tail is clip... but I like the picture and will love to see the dark morph.
Here is a quick re-work at you picture, hope you don't mind.
I would prefer somewhere between the two. Had the head been turned more as a profile the light would have nicely lit that side of the face. If this is cropped (I assume it is) I would revisit the image and add back some room top, bottom, and left (hoping you have the complete tail on the original). Very cool to see a dark morph, and natural prey!
I have many, many shots of this bird ... profile, face on, head up, head down, yanking the guts out of that poor little mouse, looking around, you name it, I shot it :D
I seem to be having an issue with CS2 - maybe someone can advise??? I am new to it - was using PS7 before and loved it with no problems. However, with CS2, when I edit a pic, it looks just fine for lightness/darkness/contrast/sat. Then when I save it for web, it goes darker. Any suggestions??? These were shot in RAW, in case that matters, but it doesn't like jpegs either :(
Let me show you what I mean, okay???
This is how CS2 saved this robin pic: (darker than I wanted)
And this is how I wanted it to look (went back in and adjusted Curves) It was a guessing game about how light it actually was ...