I like it. Very dramatic. I think that with the eyes lightened a bit the black fur would look great as there is lots of detail there.
If it fits with your personal ethics, you might consider eliminating the bits of fluff from the fur.
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It is dramatic but without that eye contact it just looks very dark to me. I'd love to see it with the dark tones pulled up a bit so you can barely make out the rest of the face.