Even though there is no eye contact here, I think this image shows a very nice behavior. I think the tones are handled very nicely, the light is beautiful. I can't suggest anything else other than slight CW rotation.
Hi John,
Great action and love the water splash on between the wings. I would do a slight CW rotation. I was wondering if you have a version with a better eye contact (eye fully open)? that might work better IMO.
Cheers