Fragment of your imagination

[Ákos Lumnitzer]

This took me barely a minute. :)



I am what I am
Not what you think I am
I am a creature of your dreams
A being of many means
I lay still awaiting the moment
I can strike with the force of a gale
At least that is how my prey will perceive
The mighty gape I am here to bare.

[Julie Kenward]

Akos, the image is great! I love the eyes most of all! It goes perfectly with your poem and the two totally compliment each other.

My one suggestion on the writing is to lose the commas at the end of each sentence and let the reader find his way through the poem to the end. Our minds love to find their own cadence and my mind kept pausing after each comma - even when I felt it would work better to keep my thoughts moving.

Great to have you here in the forum! Sit down and do this again sometime!

[Lance Warley]

"I am a creature of your dreams
A being of many means"

That is great writing, and the words go perfectly with the image. As I read the words andlook at it, I can feel the archetypal winds blowing through the dreamspace between the worlds.

Terrific stuff, Akos. I hope you post more of your work in here.

[Ákos Lumnitzer]

Hi guys

Thank you for the encouragement and advice! :)

[denise ippolito]

Akos, Very nicely done!!