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paul leverington
02-01-2009, 09:12 PM
"DEADWOOD U.S.A."

Ice pierces like sharks teeth today-
in Deadwood U.S.A...

All the summer birds have fled their death-
before the winter's screaming...cold...breath.

Leaving only -the toughest- behind-
in a world-- so unkind.

And even those who find refuge underground-
are sought out ---and found.

But there's one who knows-
as does the hawk wind that blows.

That the hawks rule the sky!

THAT THE HAWKS RULE THE SKY!!!

So beware all you ground dwellers--

THE REDTAIL RULES!!

In Deadwood....

U.S.A.



I get in these moods....

Paul

Alfred Forns
02-01-2009, 09:47 PM
Hi Paul Remember the first time it was posted and has the same impact !!! Fine all around !!!! Big Congrats !!!

Julie Kenward
02-01-2009, 09:57 PM
Fantastic! Fantastic! The photo totally makes the words come alive, Paul.

There is a different rhythm in some of the cadences and I think if you kept working on it you could even them out and really take the reader for a ride. I do think, overall, that this piece is so vibrant and alive and I'm so glad you shared it with us!

Lance Warley
02-02-2009, 12:41 PM
Very, very powerful, Paul.

"Vibrant" and "Alive" are perfect descriptions.

I get a cold shiver just reading it. And the photo goes with the words perfectly.

Really nice job, Paul. I hope you post more here.